:: orochinagi

it's called "Five to ten"

Horny dudes will like this one

http://www.dontpaniconline.com/xarpages ... e/?id=1453

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I see somebody had an overdose of Vishema's coffee.

You've used the word "fuck" about 34 times in this whole story. Might as well be a new record for a short story?

Despite the weird subject, I like how you've used your descriptions and details well when talking about the main character's desprateness.

stupid chinese proxies, I can't open the site...


Is it possible to paste the story here?

Gunsmith i see you have been the webmaster of an internet community for a long time.

It's pretty nice, but i think the ending is too forced. The internet is fast damn!

fast damn or damn fast?

criticism noted! *hmms and nods*

Read.

Weird. You want better criticism, please send money to my Paypal account. Thank you.

short stories are a lot harder, you can't just keep writing to your heart's content

hey, help me out here, gotta hand this in asap

http://karlsimposter.com/text/bareback% ... arless.htm

you likey or dupk fail?

I like it. It think it has good tension.

But then again english is not my first language. You know what, pay Shiny to criticize your work just to be sure.

i can only offer shiny $ex

Gunsmith wrote:i can only offer shiny $ex

Perhaps something else then? Your sex is all over ON; not exclusive. Or profitable.

j/k, I'll read over it.

Frankly, I thought the discussion and rollercoster of emotions from remorse, to anger to even sarcasm between both Harry and Charlie felt as if they were just like any real people who were put into this situation.

In short, it was well written.

Oh man, against swearing makes you a 'pansy'?

It was a little too short, I guess. But the ending left some taste in the mouth.

Gunsmith NEVER fails to excite me.

i don't know why, but i thought charlie was a guy and that they were a gay couple until the end.

well written.

Furry liquids? WTF?